Darkness

[aynat]

Oh! the darkness of a mind, as it struggles with the world.
No longer simple things to contemplate, just all that is bad.
No happness lives in the darkened soul, the heavy heart,
No one gives the morbid mind a reason to be glad.
Feed not upon the misery of others, as suffice afflicts.
The selfish, the moaner, the one of no hope, lives
The one of no redemption, no saving grace, nothing
Be as miserable as your outlook, to others, depicts.
Why be happy, why show some hope, why not just lie
Let your misery cover you in a wet blanket of woe
Or, live, rejoice, be happy lest all hope for you shall die.
Although, I too, get feelings of sadness, of inclompleteness
Although I feel my aloneness, and wish it was no so
I know that I have love to give, a heart that will respond
Whilst ever I can stand in the dust of life, until it is my time to go.

Dedicated to all you beautiful ladies that I will never meet.

[pooky56]

once again you have managed to enthrall me!! thank you for sharing this with us ...............

[katiew]

Thanks for sharing your poem Aynat, I loved reading it.
You never know your " luck" ( I use the term loosely lol) you might get to meet some of the ladies from overs.
Merry Christmas to you Aynat and all the best for 2009.

[Cherie]

We all feel rotten some days BB . you at least can express your emotions in a poem .. not I

Haha .. I am pretty ordinary at this sort of expression

Hey ... Tomorrow the sun shall shine again .. well that is what I tell myself anyhow and the smiles return ...

So .... keep your heart open and you will be surprised what can fill it.

[Soi]

It is really nice to see someone express their feelings in poetry, I dabble a bit nothing as elequent as BB ,he sure puts together some really excellent prose that we all enjoy reading, for a while I went through a patch of darkness and the future looked really bleak,I dont know what changed but 1 morning I was watching the butcher birds teasing the cat who was trying to sleep on the front lawn , and I realised this is life , enjoy it, try and see the positive side life is too short to be miserable, when a chirpy little overseas telesales lady, rings you up in the middle ofyour afternoon nap, to sellyou a mobile phone be polite and and listen to her spiel before telling her to Foxtrot Uniform!!enjoy all the happy days ahead , the sands of time move quickly.Enjoy life while you can, Soi

[pooky56]

hello up there soi!!! have missed you!! hope you and the wife are well and happy !!!

[aynat]

BB ,he sure puts together some really excellent prose that we all enjoy reading, Soi

Just as a matter of interest, Prose, by itself is not rhyming poetry, Prose is more words as in a book, but can also be free verse or Non-rhyming poetry.

As my stuff has structured lines of rhyme it is not prose. As to whether it can be accepted as poetry is up to the reader, I guess.

Rhymed prose is a literary form and literary genre, written in unmetrical rhymes. This form has been known in many different cultures. In some cases the rhymed prose is a distinctive, well-defined style of writing. In modern literary traditions the boundaries of poetry became very broad (free verse, prose poetry, etc.), and some works may be described both as prose and poetry. From Wikki,

[Soi]

thought I was paying you a compliment, but as usual you come back with a negative comment , what a sad lonely person you must be!!

[aynat]

Here we go, this is how it starts.

I said "as a matter of interest" thee is nothing negative in passing on knowledge.

I accepted you compliment adn it ws obvious that you made one.

I honestly think that some peopel answer my posts just to come back with some hard nose comment...Well if that is your thing, go for it. Putting this "what a sad lonely person you must be!!" indicates your true reason for commenting at all as far as I can see.

If you thought I was belittling your comment, that is your problem and I am sorry for the upset it may have casued you.

I meant nothing more than a little interest in the difference between prose and rhyme.